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new poem for creative writing course?
So I have this creative writing course. I am very very new to poetry/creative writing, and we have to write a short poem that is a metaphor. So I was wondering if you guys could grade it for me, and give me some pointers? It’s called “Home”, and is supposed to be a metaphor for a man’s heart.*Note-Doesn’t have to rhyme, or be a certain length, etc. Lots of freedom in the class.There is a house that many people know about.This house Graffiti Light Fixtures isn’t a home.It is surrounded by high walls, cracked and degraded by one.The courtyard and outside are ugly. Unkempt, unclean, broken.Inside, there are grotesque signs of life. So many have been through this house, They left behind their pain.They used the house for protection,They used the house to spew their venom and anger.Their scars cover the inside of the house:Ripped wallpaper, graffiti, dirt in every corner.The floors are worn and cracked.And though all these people have used this house,They never come back to it.They never care for it.The house is left behind, and forgottenShortly after the people first enter.It will not easily open it’s doors again.Though the hidden beauty on the inside will never be seen.The colorful paintings that no one would think to paint.The intricate light fixtures that can take your breath away.And yet,This house will never be a home.Please don’t be too harsh btw =P But I can take constructive criticism.
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