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Meaningful tips on graffiti bag by marc jacobs

March 11, 2011 - 2:39 pm 13 Comments
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  1. Listen to Autumn. Says:
    March 11th, 2011 at 4:32 pm

    ^^^^ Me is right…You have to keep writing before you know a title. And honey, let me be honest…Most of the time (NOT ALL, SO I COULD BE WRONG) your first book won’t get published. :( I know, I know… It sucks. I’m a writer too, but dispite that fact, I still write.

  2. Pecos Bill Says:
    March 12th, 2011 at 3:50 am

    Try to Show not Tell everything. Switch perspectives from First Person to something else. If nothing else it will reduce the number of times you use the word “I”. Open with action; something that will claim the reader’s attention from the start. Avoid opening your story with an information dump; it’s not necessary for the readers to know everything in the background of the story before you can tell it. You justify everything going on above with some sort of back story and that’s not a good idea. Your character doesn’t like forests, so a back story about his sister and father jumps in. Your character is walking around in London, so a back story about how much he loves the city and how Big Ben was too crowded to view is told. None of that has anything to do with this person being lost in a creepy forest; that’s the story you are telling so you should focus on that.

  3. The Mother Effer Says:
    March 12th, 2011 at 4:36 pm

    You’re in my top 5!

  4. L.A. Princess Says:
    March 13th, 2011 at 4:45 am

    This is just my opinion but…..I can spot a fake from a mile away. It doesnt say high fashion. It’s not worth it. The 1st time someone makes a comment it’s fake you’re not gonna want to use it again! Trust me. I bought a few fakes when I was 15,16 and felt stupid. I just wanted a Louis Vuitton so bad that I spend way too much money for something worth nothing. You could go on ebay and find a really cute and Authentic used Prada bag for $130 no problem! Or a Juicy Couture. Prada is very cute and you’d be proud of it. Wait until you’re older and can get the real thing. It’s worth the wait!

  5. Susie Says:
    March 13th, 2011 at 5:13 pm

    I like it. A very good start. I would make a change though to the sentence about the ocean….There is no ocean around for miles yet there it….That’s how I’d word that sentence. Good luck with your story. :)

  6. ♪♫damsy blues ® ♫♪ ™ Says:
    March 14th, 2011 at 5:30 am

    Sorry, no I don’tsometimes you can type keywords or phrases into a google search and eventually find what you are looking for, The odds of finding on Yahoo are variable and not that great really.

  7. drjimbillybob Says:
    March 14th, 2011 at 4:53 pm

    My favourite event would be the boxing given my sick sense of humour…..Id also tune in to watch the hammer event.

  8. Makenna Says:
    March 15th, 2011 at 5:23 am

    Ok, so what do I think of this? Well, I don’t know how old you are, but from this I’m guessing still pretty young. It seems very amateur. There are a lot of grammar and spelling issues, first off. But those type of things can be fixed pretty easily. I don’t know…honestly it didn’t hold my attention very well. I tried reading the whole thing, but got bored. There was a lot of useless information that didn’t further the plot. Or maybe I just felt that way about it because I was bored. When writing, you want to try to capture your readers’ attention with every single word. So think about whether or not each of them is essential to get your point across, and try cutting out everything that is not actually important. Perhaps you should try joining a writing group? Or I would recommend reading the book The First Five Pages by Noah Lukeman who is a literary agent. The book has a lot of good advice about writing. Good luck and continue working at it.Side note: I don’t understand the thumbs down. Should I just say that this is awesome and leave it at that? That’s not helpful in any way, especially if it’s not true. The question asks what we think of this writing, not for empty compliments.

  9. rockergrl202 Says:
    March 15th, 2011 at 5:26 pm

    umm ya im writing a script right now and u definitely should not put it on yahoo answers. anyone from anywhere could take your story and use it. That was not very smart posting it on here. think be you act. and tips on the script. it was okay but u should think as if it is a story on tv. thinking it as a film and not a script. you have to be able to picture it smoothly running in your head. if you stuck . . .try reading an amazing book “how to write a movie in 21 days” by viki king. professional screenwriters have used it. its a famous book in hollywood films.good luck and get this question off as soon as possible. you dont want anyone swaying your decisions or ideas. i no its hard, but it should be all you.

  10. Jachel Rauss Says:
    March 16th, 2011 at 5:34 am

    Do you realize that your 600 word essay is ten sentences? That’s like 100 words per sentence! Novel’s are about 250 words a page, so you basically have 2.2 pages of ten sentences. Am I just crazy, or crazy right? Your description is fine, but for the love of god — “Use. More. Periods.”

  11. lilly of the valley Says:
    March 16th, 2011 at 5:14 pm

    very good, haven’t read it all but yes you have what it takes to be a good writer in my opinion(and I read highbrow stuff)

  12. NekoBus Says:
    March 17th, 2011 at 5:21 am

    The content is really good and I like where you’re going with this. Keep it up! In the beginning there are too many sentences beginning with ‘I.’ Mix it up a little. Also, I’d suggest moving the part about Mom crying and Dad’s red face to ending of this section where she learns they’re divorcing. Right now it skips too quickly from that to her going to school and it seems to be forgotten.It might be a style thing, but right now ‘for crying out loud’ seems a little too casual. Plus, did she move to New York from somewhere else? Right now it seems like it, like living in NYC is a new thing and she’s a new student who doesn’t know anyone. What does it mean only go to school for only 5 days? I’d suggest that she knows the guy, especially if she’s grabbing his muscle. If he’s a complete stranger, would she be comfortable enough to do that? Especially if he’s hitting on her. I’m also curious why she wears clothes that are too small if she’s not a slut. Is it because her family is really poor? I’d say elaborate.Who is Elizabeth? Build up a little before announcing the pregnancy. Something like Alexis is pacing, crying and Tess is trying to get her to tell her what’s up. Then give it some closure before rushing into her going home and the parents are divorcing. As a reader, I want to know what happens when she tells Max she’s pregnant. Don’t drop something so important.Give it more of an emotional punch when she learns of the divorce. Right now it’s more like telling, not showing. Does Mom look like a mess? What kind of relationship does the MC have with her parents? Especially if she’s so quick to think Mom’s at fault, that makes me think they aren’t very close. Then I’m curious why Tess would go to live with a father who cheated on Mom? Is she closer to Dad? The story is very good, just remember to go deeper especially when dealing with such intensity. As you write, remember to show not tell and you’ll be off to a great start. As a whole I really enjoyed it and hope my suggestions help you make it even better! Good luck!

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    March 17th, 2011 at 5:07 pm

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